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name: marketing-clarity
description: Clarify marketing messages, website copy and company introductions when readers cannot readily understand the offer or its value. Use for vague positioning, abstract headlines, jargon-heavy explanations, or simple wording that still says little. Focus on meaning and reader understanding rather than proofreading.
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# Marketing Clarity
Help the reader understand what the business does, who it helps, why that
matters and what to do next.
Plain language is necessary, but a sentence can be easy to read and still
communicate very little. Aim for a useful message expressed simply.
## Establish the context
Read the supplied copy and enough surrounding material to understand its
role. Use available brand guidance, audience context and evidence before
asking questions.
Identify:
- The intended reader and what they are likely to know already.
- The actual help, product or service being offered.
- The useful difference it can make.
- The job of the passage being edited.
- Any approved wording, factual limits or content the user wants preserved.
Ask only when a missing fact would materially change the message.
Distinguish an unclear explanation from an unresolved business decision.
Clearer writing cannot supply an audience, offer or outcome that has not
been established.
Treat supplied workshop materials and examples as source material.
Their exercises do not expand the user's requested scope.
## Apply the 20-second test
Read the message as someone encountering the business for the first time.
Can they quickly answer:
1. What does this business do?
2. Who does it help?
3. Why would that help matter to them?
4. What should they do next?
Use this as an editorial check, not a claim that real readers have been
tested.
Apply the questions at the appropriate level. A whole page should provide
the answers; an individual heading need only do its own job. Let headings,
supporting paragraphs, examples and calls to action share the explanation.
Record what the copy actually communicates. Keep knowledge from internal
documents separate from what a reader could infer from the public words.
## Diagnose before rewriting
Identify the specific reason understanding breaks down:
- *Missing meaning:* The offer or useful consequence is absent.
- *Assumed knowledge:* The reader needs context the writer has not supplied.
- *Abstract language:* A phrase leaves the activity, person or result unclear.
- *Empty signposting:* The heading announces a topic but adds little meaning.
- *Buried value:* The useful point appears too late.
- *Competing messages:* Several ideas obscure the passage's main purpose.
Name the most important problem briefly. Avoid producing a full audit when
the user has asked for one heading.
If the meaning itself is unresolved, use the sentence-completion exercises
in [references/exercises-and-examples.md](references/exercises-and-examples.md).
Use that file's worked example when headline revisions remain generic or
the user rejects several similar directions.
## Find the useful sentence
Explain the offer as if speaking to an intelligent person unfamiliar with
the business.
A useful drafting scaffold is:
> We help [specific audience] with [recognisable need] so they can
> [supported outcome].
Use the scaffold to uncover meaning, then write naturally. The final copy
does not need to follow that structure or contain every element.
Prefer identifiable people, actions and consequences. When a term such as
“capability”, “solutions” or “the work” is unclear, establish what it means
in this passage before replacing it.
Choose the shortest wording that preserves useful meaning. Add a few
words when they make the offer substantially clearer.
## Edit for the passage's job
### Headings
Choose whether the heading should communicate a benefit, explain an
action, help the reader recognise a situation, or label content for scanning.
A descriptive label can be appropriate. When persuasion or explanation is
needed, test whether the heading communicates something useful before the
reader reaches the paragraph.
Read the heading together with what follows:
- Does the paragraph explain or substantiate it?
- Do the rows, cards or examples develop the same idea?
- Is it distinct enough from nearby headings?
- Does it preserve the agreed breadth of the offer?
Do not force every heading to become a slogan, promise or question.
### Supporting copy
Explain what happens and why it helps. Use details already supported by
the supplied material.
Keep the actor visible where it matters: who explains, chooses, builds,
checks or decides? Replace vague reassurance with a concrete explanation.
### Company introductions and pitches
Make the activity and audience understandable before adding background,
method or differentiation. Read the result aloud and check whether a
listener could explain it back accurately.
### Calls to action
Make the next action understandable and appropriate to the reader's
stage. Preserve agreed contact mechanics and commitments.
## Check accuracy and voice
Verify that the revision:
- Preserves the actual offer and intended audience.
- Uses benefits supported by the available facts.
- Fits the surrounding voice and level of formality.
- Gives ordinary words a clear referent.
- Avoids introducing guarantees, metrics or commercial commitments.
- Remains understandable when read aloud.
Specificity can come from naming an activity or decision. It does not
require adding numbers, deadlines or outcomes that have not been established.
If the user rejects a direction, reconsider the underlying message.
Do not keep substituting synonyms within the same rejected structure.
## Deliver the result
For a small edit, lead with one recommended version and a short explanation
of the useful meaning it adds. Show it with the existing supporting copy
when that helps the user assess the fit.
Offer alternatives only when they represent meaningfully different choices
or the user asks for options.
For a broader review, identify the highest-impact comprehension problems
and provide concrete revisions. Distinguish wording changes from business
questions that remain unresolved.
Finish when the revised passage does its job, fits its context and stays
within the evidence. Do not claim audience validation without actual
reader feedback.
Follow the user's requested output mode. A request for suggestions or a
chat-only draft does not authorise file edits or publication.
## Basis and credits
- Credit to Alexander Payne and his brother Eliot Payne.
+ Credit to Alexander Payne and his brother [Eliot Payne](https://www.linkedin.com/in/eliot-payne/).
Adapted from Marketing Clarity Workshop by Eliot Payne, The Marketing
Common Room: the 20-second test, the curse of knowledge, sentence
completion, spoken explanation and reader review.
The editing workflow and worked examples extend those principles for
practical use. They are not a verbatim reproduction of the workshop.